bird talking (Creative Writing Workshop : Critiques)

• ·         It was a very lovely text, and show the sadness of the narrator., that's the sad thing i actually wanted to post.
• ·         The words used were nice,i like how you used Bird as the metaphor, though it was quite manlike. 
• ·         The tone used show the feeling, which is really great.
• ·         But, some work need to be done to improve the grammar, it was just a few errors you've made.
• ·         The used of dialog, cool, just the format of the dialog was wrong. i.e: "Wait, where're you going?" asked him. "I'm leaving you." The Parrot answered him back. Bird Talking